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如何写个人陈述(Personal Statement)

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发表于 2005-6-4 07:40:11 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
Personal Statement,也即自述,是所有出国文件中最重要的部分,它是申请者最主要的自我包装。你应该让这一文件充分反映你的个性和才智。中国申请者往往没有面谈的机会,这份文件因而愈发显得重要。

  你必须抓住机会,充分而且恰如其分地表现你的人格力量、智慧和已取得的成就。在自述的创作中要花大量的精力,决不能知难而退,草率从事。

  在写作自述的时候,你应该自问如下问题:

  1.对所要申请的学校和专业是否有深入细致的了解,能否做到在写自述时按照学校和专业的要求及特点,突出自己的申请优势?

  2.我的人生经历中有什么独特的、非同寻常的地方?在我的家庭生活和社会生活中有哪些人或事件影响了我的人生观和事业追求?这些影响有什么与众不同的地方?

  3.我最初是如何对目前所选专业感兴趣的?我在其后的岁月中又是如何加深了对这一学科领域的认识?在这一领域已经取得了什么样的成绩?是什么因素使我自信,能够在这一领域有所建树?

  4.在上学期间我从事了哪些助教、助研、社会实践、暑期工作?通过这些活动在什么方面得到了提高(比如科研能力、组织能力和领导能力等)?在步入社会后的工作中完成过什么项目,取得了哪些成就,表现出何等才干?

  5. 我的最终事业目标是什么?

  6.在我多年来的考试成绩上有没有需要解释的地方?比方说我大学成绩一直很优异但GRE成绩却不怎么理想;我高年级的成绩是否比低年级的成绩有显著的提高?

  7.在自我奋斗的过程中是否曾经克服过超常的困难,如家庭生活贫困、身体残疾等等?

  8.我是否具备杰出的品格,比如诚实、可靠、善良、刻苦等等,而我能否提供真凭实据来加以证明?我是否具备值得一提的特别的工作习惯和态度,以及禀性上的优势?

  9.我具备什么样的特殊才能,如分析能力、领导才能和交流才能?我为什么比别的申请者更具有在事业上成功的把握?

  对以上问题有了解答之后,就要注意写作技巧了。写自述的最大忌讳就是写得毫无特色、枯燥乏味。要努力发掘你的优秀之处。要写得醒目,抓住读者的注意力。

  所以,自述的第一段或者是前二段至为重要。如果你的头一、二段的内容中有闪光之处,能够给人留下不可磨灭的印象,那就达到了最佳效果。获得独特性更重要的有两个方法:一是寻找独特的思想方法或者说审视自己的独特角度,二是在陈述过程采用故事手法。

  所谓“故事”就是要有一点生动的情节。除了思想角度外,生动的情节是表现个性和独特性的又一法宝。许许多多的人可以有类似的经历和背景,但他们生命中的具体经历一定具有独特的场景。恰当地描绘一下这样的场景,就会使全文散发出生动而新鲜的气息。

  此外,你的自述还应注意以下问题:

  千万不要遗漏掉那些有用的和中肯的成就、经验等等事实。

  不要把高中甚至更早的成就也不厌其烦地列在自述上。因为中国学生申请的学位最低的也是硕士研究生,大学时期的成绩或是随后工作上的成就更为贴切,也应该足以用作素材了。

  最好不要提及政治观点、宗教信仰和其他一切容易引起争议的不同寻常的话题。

  写自述时没有必要对自己的事业和生活道路上的挫折讳莫如深。只是在描述或提到经历的苦难、挫折或失败时,切记不要流露出乞求怜悯恩赐,或气愤怀恨的情绪。

  写自述绝对不能一蹴而就,写好后需反复修改,删掉?嗦、重复的部分,增加与申请的学校和专业相对应的内容,密切注意句与句之间,段落之间,及整篇文章意思的逻辑联系。可多方听听他人的意见。

  务必做到文章中不存在任何方法,语法或拼写上的错误。

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:40:48 | 显示全部楼层
商学院ESSAY样例
Please give a brief evaluation of yourself as a leader.
  Becoming a leader in the business world has been my goal since high school. In order to succeed at any goal, one must first find a path to reach the goal, and then embark on that path. My path to becoming a leader began in high school. While studying in high school, I demonstrated great dedication, a trait necessary for a leader. I mastered several different disciplines. I passed Advanced Placement tests in Art History, Chemistry and Physics, and graduated in the top 5% of my class. I also had the opportunity to exercise actual leadership skills as President of both the Science Club and the Business Club.

  At the State University of California at Los Angeles, I continued to serve leadership positions while remaining committed to my studies. I won first place in the Phi Beta Lambda 31st State Leadership Conference in Management and Information Management. Although I worked 36 hours a week at two part-time jobs, in addition to participating in this conference, I as able to maintain my grades. I joined the General Education Honors Program. Upon entering the working world, I found that the value of leadership is priceless. The climate has changed drastically, from a cooperative, serene learning environment to a place where only the fittest survive. Luckily, my leadership training from high school and college has paid off. I was quickly promoted from purchasing agent to procurement supervisor.

  As a further step in becoming a business leader, I recently accepted an offer from Rain Bird to be a buyer/planner. In this role, I am in total control of two product lines that make about $15 million in sales each year. Although I have learned new ways to manage labor and products, in this new position I have finally found my leadership qualities to be inadequate. I need to discover how engineering changes, climate changes, and marketing promotions of Rain Bird and its competitors affect my product lines. I want to learn how information systems enhance and ease business transactions, and how to be more productive and efficient in this global economy. After consulting several fellow co-workers who have studied in UCLA's FEMBA Program, I think studying there would help me continue on my path of success.

  What do you consider to be your most important personal and professional accomplishments?

  I have made my most important personal and professional accomplishments as a member of APICS, the Educational Society for Resource Management. A co-worker introduced me to this organization. At first, I was reluctant to join because I thought, "I already have a degree in operations management; why do I need to join an association in which I would learn nothing new?" As time went on I found out more and more about this prestigious organization and gradually discovered that by contributing to it I could improve my managing abilities. I quickly became certified in Production and Inventory Management (CPIM). After about a year, I was appointed director of the San Gabriel Valley Chapter of APICS, which is the most cherished accomplishment I have to date.

  Running a chapter is like running a small business. There is a national body, like a government, which establishes by laws and rules to which we have to adhere. We have to market ourselves, capture customers(members) and make them happy by offering our products and services. We book classrooms and sponsor workshops on different aspects of manufacturing for members and non-members. Every month we have a joint meeting with the Anaheim chapter which features a renowned speaker. We also create and publish a newsletter every month to update our members about APICS and the latest manufacturing trends. Sometimes we solicit companies in the San Gabriel Valley about the possibility of offering APICS classes onsite. The greatest challenge in directing an APICS chapter is in financing all of the chapters activities.

  The most valuable benefit I have gained from being an APICS director has been the ties I have developed with fellow directors and members. In APICS, I continually meet new colleagues. They come from large and small companies, and in positions from receiving clerks to vice presidents. We all meet to discuss the latest trends in manufacturing and job opportunities around the area. By learning from each other, we can improve our companies' bottom lines. As an APICS director, I have learned a lot about marketing and finance. I would not have been able to gain such valuable knowledge without hands-on experience.The entrepreneurial abilities I have developed in this position will prove useful as I move further along my path to business success.   Why have you decided to enter the Fully Employed MBA Program? Why is this the appropriate time for you to begin?

  There are many reasons why I believe this is the perfect time for me to start the Fully Employed MBA Program at UCLA. With regard to gaining knowledge, I have been learning continuously since high school. During high school summer breaks, I took SAT workshops, and in college, I took classes even in summer quarters. When I graduated and started working, I studied to become CPIM- certified for APICS. Starting the MBA program now is the next most logical step in my career.

  In terms of career advancements, I am also pushing myself to the limit. I was quickly promoted to a supervisory level at Rain Bird and to a directing position at APICS. I want to keep my pace on this fast career track. Starting the MBA program now will surely open doors to upper management positions within Rain Bird. With regard to personal goals, I have wanted to go to UCLA since high school. I got accepted by the undergraduate school but financial difficulties forced me to choose a state university. Getting my MBA at UCLA will be a childhood dream coming true. Last but not least in making this the ideal time for me to pursue an MBA is the great support from people around me. My wife believes getting an MBA will improve the quality of our lives; my parents think that with an MBA I can be an exemplary model for my brother and sister; co-workers that are already in the FEMBA program told me the program is excellent and the experience worthwhile; and my plant manager, who is a FEMBA alumna, told me it was the best two and a half years she ever spent in school. With my high expectations and support from others, I am confident that I can succeed at UCLA. I am ready to start the FEMBA program this fall.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:41:21 | 显示全部楼层
初次联系的 E-mail(Sample)
Dear Sir,

I am a college graduate from ABC University, with a degree in Computer Science, currently working full time as a computer programmer with Bank of China, but interested in applying for a Research Assistantship at your school. Dr. Song provided me with your e-mail address and suggested that I write you about a possible position.

I attended the Special Class of Gifted Use at ABC University when I was 14 years old and earned my Bachelor's Degree in computer science there in 1996. Since graduation, I have been working with the Technology Department, Bank of China. My responsibility at the Bank is to develop application software for internal usage and help managing the Bank's database and network. I led or took part in several key projects such as Foreign Exchange Savings Accounts Networking System, the State Dragon Card Networking System and the Dragon Card-Stock Funds Transferring System. With my hardworking and continuous learning, I have gained tremendous practical experiences and knowledge in my field and also learned to be an excellent team player and a good communicator. I am quite proficient in Unix operating system, Windows NT, computer programming (using C/C++/ESQL C, and Visual Basic), and Informix database system. In addition, I have had solid hands-on experience in TCP/IP network design and implementation.

As stated earlier, I have always been interested in both computer science and biology as both disciplines are at the forefront of rapid development. Health Informatics seems a perfect subject for me as I can learn more about the healthcare discipline while using my skills in computer, especially in database and network, to make contribution to health informatics. I am convinced that with my strong technical background, diligence and intelligence, and my enthusiasm for health informatics, I will be an excellent student in this field and a good Research Assistant to you.

I would greatly appreciate it if you would grant me an opportunity for application. You may reply to me through this email address. Thank you very much for your consideration.

Sincerely yours,
xxxx
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:41:54 | 显示全部楼层
准备留学申请材料时,作为对外联系的主要文件之一的简历(Resume)的质量高低将直接影响申请者的成功率,为了能让对方清晰地了解申请者,简历在写作方面应力求真实、全面、简洁、明了。

  留学申请者的简历应包括以下这几个方面的内容:

  1.姓名。力求与各种学历证明的姓名相同,如有更改姓名的情况,务必在公证时予以声明,并附上公证书。

  2.性别。

  3.出生年月日及地点。力求与各类学历证明的出生年月日一致,出生地点写明国别和省份。

  4.国籍。

  5.婚否。

  6.现在工作单位及详细通信地址。

  7.个人教育背景。包括大学、硕士阶段的在读时间,所在大学的名称、专业和所获学位,参加工作后的受教育经历,主要指脱产接受专门的进修、培训或学习。

  8.个人从事专业的经历。填写专业经历应力求抓住重点,突出研究方向。担任教学工作的可列出主讲、助讲的课程名称,担任研究工作的可列出参加各个研究项目的课题名称。

  9.个人的著作、论文或研究成果要分门别类列出,并一定要与个人专业经历相一致。所列著作要注明名称,出版年月,出版单位。所列论文要注明论文题目,刊载杂志或期刊名称、期号、语种。对于在学术会议上发表的文章还要注明学术会议的名称、召开时间和地点等。如果其中有被外国学者评论过的,最好附上刊载评论文章的杂志名称及时间。

  10.外语水平。注明参加TOEFL、GRE等考试的时间、地点及成绩。若申请者掌握多门外语,则要一一注明语种并说明熟练程度。

  11.参加何种学术团体,得到何种荣誉。学术团体一般应是省、市或行业一级以下的专业学术团体,在学术团体中所担任职务可加以注明。荣誉主要是指在专业、技术研究方面获得的奖励和荣誉,并要注明获奖名称,颁奖时间和颁奖单位。

  12.拟申请的大学和导师的姓名。可根据申请者查询的资料予以注明,并要注意按照每个单位、每位导师一份简历的原则,即在同一份自传中不必注明全部想要联系的单位和导师。

  13.拟进行的研究方向和希望从事研究的题目。国外院校的专业面一般较宽,要根据国外情况,力求专业面与其一致。研究课题可根据自己的研究兴趣和需要,同时也要尽量考虑对方的条件。

  在简历的书写过程中申请者还应注意必须尽力保证字迹的工整、清楚,最好用打字机打印。总之,一份成功简历的秘诀在于:既不要言过其实,又必须充分反映自己的实际水平
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:42:37 | 显示全部楼层
I was born on December 6, 1967 in Shijiazhuang, the largest city in Hebei, China. I lived there until completion of senior high school study in 1984.

In September 1984, I was admitted to Tianjin Finance and Economics College after successful performance in the competitive college entrance examination. In the four years that followed, I studied in the Department of Accounting and Statistics of that college and obtained a diploma in June 1988.

In August 1988. I began to work in business and was an assistant at Da Xing Enterprise Corp. Since November 1980, I have been working with Electronic Memories & Magnetics Corp. At first. I was a junior accountant; then successively I became assistant to Accounting Manager, accountant, and senior accountant (present position).The attached Personal Data gives a detailed account of my work experiences.

As a result of my six and a half years of experience in accounting. I have become thoroughly familiar with accounting operations in medium size business firms. This, however, can not satisfy my ambition and desire for knowledge. To meet the needs of career development in the future, I have decided to continue my education. My plans are first to complete baccalaureate study, and then to work toward an MBA degree in the field of accounting.

Most business firms in China are expanding, and many new companies are being set up every month. My proposed study will no doubt reinforce my qualification for a more gainful executive position.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:43:24 | 显示全部楼层
A student of the Peking University’s inaugural program of advertising, I am writing in support of my application for acceptance into your graduate program of communication studies. With my solid education and my professional experience that is as colorful as it is rare, I believe that, with your seasoned guidance, I can build upon my strong background, for a pioneering career in China’s booming advertising industry.

At Peking University, dubbed the Harvard of China by President Clinton on his recent trip to Chins, I have been a student star on campus due to my outstanding academic performances. When I entered into this university in 1995, I already stood out among my crop of freshmen, having won a total of scores in the 1995 National College Entrance Examinations that was the fifth highest in Beijing. A fervent fan of my chosen subject of studies, I have proved myself as much of an intellectual wizard in higher learning as I was in grade school, as demonstrated by my grades, which placed me at the very top in my class of 23. My GPA in the first three years is 89.5, a rarely seen high grade in PKU. My GPA for core courses is over 90, far higher than that of my fellow students. I was the only one who received 100, the full mark, in two theoretical courses, the advanced mathematics and appreciation of fine arts. In practical courses like computer design, my grades were also high, sometimes as high as 96. In recognition of such stellar performances, I have been named the top student of the department and granted Academic Excellence Scholarships for three consecutive years. I was elected the Student Representative for Academic Affairs.

But I was no bookworm. To broaden my vision and enrich my knowledge, I also chose electives in such fields as Russian Literature and Chinese History. I have spent considerably more time in the library than my classmates. The more I learnt on campus, the more I hoped to see the real world outside the ivory tower. So in the first summer recess, I applied for a temporary job at the Yaxing Advertising Agency, affiliated with the China Sports Daily, when most of my friends and classmates were enjoying themselves at home or travelling around. Appointed as the accounting executive assistant, I helped organize a promotional event for the Atlantic Olympic Games. This job gave me a picture of China’s advertising industry.

In the first semester of the academic year 1996-1997, I worked part-time with the PKU TV Net, where I was offered a splendid opportunity to improve my ability in journalism. Being a Weekly News broadcaster, I regularly faced tens of thousands of audience, which greatly increased my confidence. I learnt to think independently and cooperate wit others when doing the series reports “PKU students’ life”, a program which was mainly about student recipients of prizes in national and international contests. Conducted with creativity and diligence, the program was placed among the best programs in the PKU TV Net.

Unlike most other students, I have never stopped working while in school. From September 1997 on, I have been working as a research assistant in CCTV’ s Qiantu Advertising Company, the sixth biggest in China. My responsibility is to establish a market database. Difficult as it was, I have handled it without a glitch. I have also done part-time work helping to promote the President Food Corporation and served as a research assistant in the S & D Research Agency, a consulting firm specialized in conducting market surveys for multinationals in China.

With special skills in Chinese calligraphy, I taught calligraphy in the China Children’s Center, the best of its kind in China. My students, mostly six to twelve years old, had difficulties in understanding the aesthetics inherent Chinese calligraphy. To help them, I taught them Chinese poems and ancient characters instead of confining myself to only calligraphy. The approach turned out to be very effective, and their skills improved dramatically. In these and other similar experiences, I gained skills of interpersonal communication, particularly in terms of how to understand other people’s problems and how to help them out.

It is in my working experience that I first developed the desire to pursue advanced studies in a quality graduate program in the United States. As an intern with the Dentsu Young & Rubicam Advertising Corporation, one of the world’s largest communications groups, I now witness firsthand the dramatic social and economic changes engenderd by the proliferation of digital technologies and increasing corporate globalization. These changes have created the highly sophisticated information society. Trying daily to develop wordings that could catch people’s attention in this complex society, I have acquired a heightened sense of urgency about improving attention in this complex society, I have acquired a heightened sense of urgency about improving China’s advertising industry at both theoretical and practical levels. I believe that advertising expertise from such advanced countries as the U. S. and Japan would certainly help China. In order to command such expertise and then introduce it to my country, I am making this application so that I can have a firm grasp of the advanced theories and practices your country has developed in communication field, particularly in respect of advertising.

I believe that my English proficiency is more than sufficient for me to undertake the kind of studies that I am seeking through this application. I have scored well in such English language tests as TIEFL and GRE. As a better indicator of my practical language skills, I just finished translating an English book “The History of Graphic Design” into Chinese together with four other translators, including a professor. My writing, listening and oral English are as good as my reading.

This application is being made with a sense of mission. As an undergraduate, I have learned the basics of advertising, and I would be promising in China as a graduate from one of the country’s best universities. With a booming advertising industry in China, I will surely secure a well-paying job. But I cannot be satisfied unless I can help my country as much I help myself. For that, I wish to enhance my capabilities by pursuing graduate studies in such fields as mass communication, communication studies or media studies at a university in North America, where these genres of studies are much more developed than in China. Whatever program I get in, I would like my studies to be focused on the theories of and practices in advertising. If you find me qualified for advanced studies in areas other than those I have mentioned, I would greatly appreciate it if you could let me know any suggestions that you may have.

The University of Hawaii is well known for its unique position as a bridge between east and west. It is well known for its excellence in the communication field, complete with an accomplished faculty and modern research resources. With students from various nations, it provides its students with a good chance to learn from different cultures. It is an ideal place for communication studies. If I am accepted, I believe I can make quick progress in communication studies in general, and in advertising in particular.

I plan to return to China after the completion of my graduate studies either to teach at one of the larger Chinese universities or to lead a Chinese advertising company. In either case, I will bring back what I will have learned. I hope that, when the history of modern advertising in China is written, I will be remembered as one of those who have played a pioneering role in the development of the industry.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:44:08 | 显示全部楼层
After graduating from the prestigious foreign Affair Co1lege, where I majored in French 1anguage and internationa1 relations and studied English as the second foreign 1anguage, I passed the highly competitive entrance test and joined the Chinese Ministry of Foreign Affairs. I worked in the Ministry's Department of Asian Affairs for four years, inc1uding 2 years in the Chinese Embassy in Phnom PenomPenh. After that, I have been working to date for the cultural changes Center, an organization affiliated to the Chinese Ministry of Culture. 

Curious enough, the more I work, the more inadequate I find myse1f to keep up with the rapid changes taking place in China. I feel an increasing need to broaden my horizons and upgrade my knowledge.It is time, I realized, I had some further studies. 

China is now in a transition from a state-control1ed economy to a free market economy. The dynamics freed-up by the economic reform have worked mirac1es. As China improves its economic legislation and nears the goal of being granted WTO membership, I be1ieve the golden era for China's economic development is yet to come and business opportunities will be tremendous. That is why I decided to study business. After the completion of the post-graduate study program, I will come back to China, equipped with the economic theories and expertise that I acquire at your school, to play a role in the economy boom in China.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:44:46 | 显示全部楼层
范文:计算机专业攻读硕士
PERSONAL STATEMENT

A fourth-year student grounded solidly in the basics of computer science, I am writing in pursuit of graduate studies that I hope can help me acquire cutting-edge expertise in software programming in general and parallel processing in particular.

Intrigued by the power of the computer since high school, I have been trying to stay on top of the computer science by concentrating my undergraduate studies on those subjects that underpin the discipline, particularly mathematics and electronics. To build up my solid knowledge in these subjects, I have taken virtually all the related courses that the university has had to offer. These courses include Algorithm & Data Structure, Mathematical Modeling, Network Theory, Digital Circuit, Discrete Mathematics, and Electric Circuit. With a sophisticated understanding in these areas, I have been well positioned to appreciate the basic theories of computer science and their applications to software development.

Aided by the firm command of the basics, I have found it not only easy but also exciting to study the various subjects covered by my major. As most of my classmates, I took a variety of courses ranging from AI to Computer Network, from AI Programming to Knowledge Engineering, from Pattern Recognition to Software Engineering, and from Database Design to Programming Language Design. But I distinguished myself by my academic record, which places me as one of the very top students in my class. My grades in these course never went below A or B. I have also stood out as one of the few who have taught themselves Real Time System and Computer Graphics.

Armed with sound training in the basic theories and applied technologies, I have been able to move on into deeper and wider areas of computer science. Early in my university life, I began to understand that the modern computer's base, the Turing machine, was reaching its limits in AI. Gradually, I have narrowed down my research interest to parallel & distributive computing, which I understand can significantly boost the performance of personal computers by giving them some of the functions of mainframe computers.

Of all the areas of computer science, parallel processing fascinates me the most. The term first came to me when I read the book Computer Organization & Design: the Hardware/Software Interface as part of my Computer Architecture course. By teaching me how the performance of computers can be improved through pipelining and parallel processing, the book reshaped my thinking in computer science.

My lab experience deepened my understanding of parallel processing. In my third year, I worked on a GIFT project with Dr. Komatsu, chief researcher of IBM Tokyo Research Laboratory and Dr. Koseki, one of Dr. Komatsu's colleagues. The project was to introduce the architecture supports that can allow compilers to derive more parallelism from programs. These architecture supports include three designs, a conditional execution mechanism to execute instructions without normal conditional jump instructions, speculative execution mechanism, and a dynamic memory disambiguation mechanism to execute memory access instructions simultaneously.

As undergraduate students seldom get to be involved in actual research, I took full advantage of the opportunity of working in the lab. I particularly enjoyed the seminars held twice a week as part of the lab work. At these seminars, I engaged in in-depth discussions with Master's students under Dr. Komatsu's seasoned guidance. The lab experience is adding weight and insights to my graduation paper An Improvement of Software pipelining using Loop Transformations. In this paper, I will introduce a translation algorithm using loop interchange and loop skewing. This algorithm can minimize the initiation interval of loop nest to improve the performance of software pipelining.

Through my lab experience and other research, I have developed a long-term professional objective: the advancement of the parallel processing technology. While I have strong faith in this technology, I also know its limitations as it is today. Some sequential algorithms can't be easily translated into fast parallel algorithms and most compilers can only distribute works on one platform. Another unsettled problem is that programming parallel computers is now still a manual work. But even the modern language (like Java, C++) can do some automatic translation work. If a compiler can be developed to translate and distribute work into different platforms, personal computers will be able to work like mainframe computers at a fraction of the mainframes' costs. This will make it possible to connect all the computers in the world and speed up all the processes.

To help take the parallel processing technology beyond what is capable of today, I have to undertake more advanced studies. This, I believe, can only be accomplished in a quality graduate program like yours. I plan to pursue a master's degree with a concentration on paralleling and distributing compilers, operating systems or computer networks, a combination thereof. With the training that goes into such an advanced degree, I think I will be able to take great strides towards fulfilling my professional objective. When I do, I think I will be standing on the cutting-edge of the computer science.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:45:26 | 显示全部楼层
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As a senior student of Zhengzhou Grain College, I am now applying for the acceptance to the University of Waikato strong1y. I will graduate from Zhengzhou Grain College in June 2000 and now I am major in Marketing. Marketing is a burgeoning field in China, then I hope I can learn more modern knowledge on marketing in New Zea1and.
During my co1lege years of study, I have mastered much professiona1 knowledge and elementary technica1 abilities, especially on the marketing. I am strongly convinced that I can undertake some research during my further study. Meanwhile, due to the open study environment in my co1lege, my ana1ytical ability and problem so1ving skills have also gotten great improved. I think, with the ski11s, I can success in my study.

At the same time, my good Eng1ish is the basis for me to study in an English-speaking country. I am fluent in reading and writing and I passed the CET-4 (Which is a nationa1 Co1lege English Test) in 1998. Now I am trying to improve my spoken English, reading aloud every morning on campus. I think that I can adapt myself to the new environment of New Zealand soon after I arrive at the University of Waikato.

At the same time, to me, Computer is a tool for study. Especially with tl1e computer science development, Internet has made the earth smaller and smaller and information more and more available. I have always been fond of the computer and use it to help my study moreover, from the Internet, I have known more about the foreign countries and universities. The beautiful scenery and the peaceful environment of New Zealand are the big appeal to me. Moreover, tl1ere have advanced educationa1 system and knowledgeable teacher. Therefore, l decided to get my further study in New Zealand. The University of Waikato, with l6 undergraduate degrees, 70 interdisciplinary programs, is firmly placed amongst Universities internationally. I am sure, after the study of Master programs in the famous University of Waikato, I can be something in the marketing field. . I am eager to get your information soon. Best Regards

Yours Sincerely
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:46:07 | 显示全部楼层
Mechanical engineering is the foundation of industry. It plays a key role in the national economy. It’s broad field including general engineering, aeronautical, chemical and nuclear engineering, etc. Provides a sufficient room of choices for me to realize the dream of becoming a scientist or a mechanical engineer. It was with this fact in mind that I decided to choose mechanical engineering as the major field of study for both undergraduate and graduate career at Tsinghua University.

During nearly eight years of study at Tsinghua University, I completed a total of 47 courses in undergraduate study, 14 courses in graduate study. The major courses that interested me most included: Theoretical Mechanics, Strength of Materials, Elasticity and Plasticity Mechanical Analysis of Plastic Deformation Processes, Theory of Metal Forming, Computer Language and Programming, Mechanical Design, etc… After graduation, I entered the First Heaby Machinery Works (in northeast of China). During this period, I became familiar with the design and manufacturing of some heavy machines, thus furthering my interest in mechanical engineering. At the same time, I found that many good ideas of design could not be put into existence because of the backwardness in raw material quality and processing techniques. This fact impelled the related areas and me to concentrate my research interest on materials science and processing. Through careful survey, I selected a subject about the quality control of heavy disc forging and took it as my research subject for master degree. After over tow years of investigation, I finally made a great innovation in the forging process, making the end product rate increase from 50% to 90%. In the course of investigation and my later working after graduate study, I also found some problems that are common in mechanical industry. For example, how do cracks in products during hot metal working generate and develop? How to avoid cracks? How do non-metallic inclusions affect the properties of materials? How to control the content, shape and distribution of inclusions in final products? Solution to these problems will improve the quality of many kinds of products. But they are often difficult to be solved because they include knowledge of many disciplines and require many new research methods. I feel that what I have learned is far from sufficient to tackle all the problems. Thus I have decided to continue my education by pursuing a doctoral degree in mechanical engineering in a highly industrialized country like the United States.

I plan to complete my degree objective I 3 to 5 year and hope that I will be able to further my knowledge I areas including Solid Mechanics, Materials Science and Processes, CAD/CAM, etc… After completing my graduate study, I will return to contribute my learning to my country. I plan to work as a researcher of a teacher at an institute or a university.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-4 07:46:38 | 显示全部楼层
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My purpose for applying to graduate school is to both expand on my existing knowledge and to create additional opportunities for myself in the future. I believe that graduate school will prepare me for a successful and challenging career in the aerospace industry.

Even though I have chosen dynamics as my field of specialization, I am keeping my mind open to other areas of aerospace so that I do not limit myself. I am currently working at JPL in an academic part time position and I believe that this first hand experience will clarify my future educational needs and directions.

While attending UCLA, I have had a number of part time positions, which included being a computer consultant, AutoCAD operator, and a lab for the Non-Destructive Evaluation Laboratory at UCLA. My diverse work experiences have given me a better understanding of what opportunities are available to me. There is so much that I would want to learn and under- stand. I have always been fascinated with the space program, and some day,I want to be instrumental in operating in the space program.

I have wanted to be an engineer ever since my father shared with me some of his published engineering ariticles. I have always been a hard worker and have shown that I can handle a diverse work load incoporating work and college intocollege into my schedule.

I believe that UCLA can provide me with the tools to succeed in the aerospace industry. I have enjoyed attending UCLA as an undergraduate student and would enjoy being a graduate student here as well.
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非常感激,收藏了,备用!
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谢谢楼主。
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 楼主| 发表于 2007-6-16 18:54:17 | 显示全部楼层

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Post by Williamwoo;660111
谢谢楼主。
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好贴!顶一下!
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一定要收藏了!~呵呵
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正在苦思冥想如何拟定个人陈述了。真是前人栽树,后人乘凉了:)

感谢张博士!
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