谁有免费打分网站，给俺雅思作文G打打分？

anniee7

谁有免费打分网站，给俺雅思作文G打打分？谢

色色

还不如贴在这里让大家给你打分。

skilldragon

同意，顺便学习一下

CHERRY06

anniee7

那就贴一个。

RITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane,
you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel.
Write a letter to the airline. Explain what has happened, describe the bag and its
contents and say what you would like them to do about it.
You should write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir,
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It
would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more
traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
You should write at least 250 words.

Dear Sir,

Sorry for make inconvenient for you. I ever took a flight to London last week by your company airline. Since the plane is delayed, I was so tired, almost fall into deep sleep when I was shaken awake by another passenger, I thought I was the last one, so I tun down to the plane. Unfortunately, I left my bag on the seat since I was in hurry.

My bag is very common, dark red color, black belt. Since it is quite brand new, there is no mark on the surface. And I have not habit to write name in the inside as a lot of woman do. However, there was a lot of things in them, 1000 dollars, several credit cards and my ID cards. They are all important to me.

I am very appreciated that your company send somebody to do search at once if possible. And feedback me whatever the result.

I am looking forward good news coming.

Thank your cooperation in advance.

Your Sincerely,


I don’t do agree with children spend too much time indoors to play computer or do other electronic entertainment, for example, watching TV.

We often read some articles in the newspaper, which complained the children’health level decline in the recent years, especially outdoors  one. We also can hear some parents take their son/daughter to hospital for the eyesight is not good comparing their young age.And we also knew the root cause of the young age fat is not only for eat too much  fast food ,but also for spend too much time watching the screen.

Above negative influences prove how badly circled our children at home. Although the technology is much advanced today, chatting on-line, idling in the imagine world is the beat way to avoid actually coming studying burden. What’more, the fascinating games are meet the youngster characters. More and more company push their new product faster than ever, but almost are violent, not teach player do peace.

From my long explanation about disadvantages of playing indoors and more advantages of outdoors, people can earlier recognized which method we shall choice or praise our children to do. The earlier you take action, the more they can get. Please hurry up to follow me.

William

Dear Sir,

Sorry for make inconvenient for you. I ever took a flight to London last week by your company airline. Since the plane is delayed, I was so tired, almost fall into deep sleep when I was shaken awake by another passenger, I thought I was the last one---, so I tun down to the plane. Unfortunately, I left my bag on the seat since I was in hurry.

My bag is very common, dark red color, black belt. Since it is quite brand new, there is no mark on the surface. And I have not habit to write name in the inside as a lot of woman do. However, there was a lot of things in them, 1000 dollars, several credit cards and my ID cards. They are all important to me.

I am very appreciated that your company send somebody to do search at once if possible. And feedback me whatever the result.

I am looking forward good news coming.

Thank ----your cooperation in advance.

Your Sincerely,

这篇作文不会的高分，也就是说，7分以下，6分左右。

孟菲斯

这样的形势挺好呵，不如再开一个雅思学习的分坛怎么样？

色色

楼主两篇文章确实不能打高分. 就给5 分.

既然丢失了包, 总要说是从哪里到哪里什么时候的飞机吧, 航班号呢? 出机场有没有报告机场柜台丢失了包?

第二篇语法错误较多, 读起来有点费劲. 论文一般是先提出自己的观点, 然后从正反面进行论证, 最后总结. 感觉楼主在中间部分不是很够.


继续加油,

William

[color="Red"][color="Red"]1. 能够贴出来说明你有胆量，文章也写得不错，我觉得是6分，但是想得到7分你还要在加把劲，多倍多练，希望你能贴出更多的！贴出十次，你就7分了。

2. 说说第二篇，同意Sir女郎的意见，虽然是典型的四段论，中间内容少了点，说服力不够，虽然要求字数是250，但一般要写到350-400才有可能达到7分以上。

虽然第一段提到了观点，但并没有给人留下太深的印象，也就是说第一段再下下功夫。

3. 下面说说语法错误：红字部分删除，蓝字部分加上，划线部分要推敲。

I don’t do agree with children spending too much time indoors to play computer or do other electronic entertainment, for example, watching TV.

We often read some articles in the newspaper, which complained the children’health level decline in the recent years, especially outdoors one. We also can hear some parents taking their son/daughter to hospital for the eyesight is not good comparing their young age. And we also knew the root cause of the young age fat is not only for eat too much fast food, but also for spend too much time watching the screen.

Above negative influences prove how badly circled our children at home. Although the technology is much advanced today, chatting on-line, idling in the imagine world is the beat way to avoid actually coming studying burden. What’more, the fascinating games are meet the youngster characters. More and more company push their new product faster than ever, but almost are violent, not teach player do peace.

From my long explanation about disadvantages of playing indoors and more advantages of outdoors, people can earlier recognized which method we shall choice or praise our children to do. The earlier you take action, the more they can get. Please hurry up to follow me.

4. 我说的人家也不一定愿意听，我只管说完就是了。

William

红字部分删除，蓝字部分加上，划线部分要推敲。

上面的标志在传上去之后找不着了？怎么回事？

William

William

我也是刚刚考完，作文7，一起切磋。共同提高。

William

还真gei来，天津搂主贴完帖子就不见人影了。

anniee7

下班回家看孩子了。别见怪。总的说大家平分在我意料之中，能有人给我说说，就目前我的水平，有好的方法提高到7分。
Willom，
谢你的帮助。有什么可以背的东西可以发到信箱anniee7@sina.com

anniee7

回了一个帖，回头看看，好象说的不很清楚，再说说。从上学时期作文就不好，没的过良。可以说我是从写英文信件和英文论文中才知道怎样写作。我个人感觉，中文作文好，写的快与英文作文好坏有直接关联。我想知道提高写作水平是背一些机经吗？

William

Post by anniee7;451807
回了一个帖，回头看看，好象说的不很清楚，再说说。从上学时期作文就不好，没的过良。可以说我是从写英文信件和英文论文中才知道怎样写作。我个人感觉，中文作文好，写的快与英文作文好坏有直接关联。我想知道提高写作水平是背一些机经吗？...

先背诵10篇，短一点，10天，然后开始写作练习。发帖子，10帖。

anniee7

好，试试

anniee7

Post by williamwoo;451822
先背诵10篇，短一点，10天，然后开始写作练习。发帖子，10帖。

把你用的好的范文，发给俺使使，背背。谢

色色

Post by anniee7;451841
好，试试

我给你打5分, 是不想你骄傲. 其实打6分也可以的.

William

Post by anniee7;451842
把你用的好的范文，发给俺使使，背背。谢...

自己找的才是好的，自己找的自己喜欢也就有背的欲望了。